My Poetry: Villanelle: Sottobosco: Gen
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stonepicnicking_okapiTitle: Sotto bosco [Undergrowth in Italian]
Poetic Form: villanelle
Length: 105
For:mafief Happy Birthday!
Inspired by: A sotto bosco with mushrooms, butterflies, a dragonfly, a lizard, and a snake by Otto Marseus van Schrieck [below].
Upon the teeming forest floor,
cabal of mushrooms stand, and lie,
on fragile stems, immortal spore.
They’re wrought in oils like kings of yore,
in sotto bosco portrait, nigh,
upon the teeming forest floor.
While lizard, asp prepare for war,
the sure-capped reign and petrify
on fragile stems, immortal spore.
In sotto voce, shadows pour
and drip while ghost-wings flutterfly
upon the teeming forest floor.
What will be, what were before
‘are still! alive!’ their thin gills cry
on fragile stems, immortal spore.
Come, little ones, come, let’s explore,
what clever, curious eyes can spy
upon the teeming forest floor,
on fragile stems: IMMORTAL SPORE!
Poetic Form: villanelle
Length: 105
For:
mafief Happy Birthday!Inspired by: A sotto bosco with mushrooms, butterflies, a dragonfly, a lizard, and a snake by Otto Marseus van Schrieck [below].
Upon the teeming forest floor,
cabal of mushrooms stand, and lie,
on fragile stems, immortal spore.
They’re wrought in oils like kings of yore,
in sotto bosco portrait, nigh,
upon the teeming forest floor.
While lizard, asp prepare for war,
the sure-capped reign and petrify
on fragile stems, immortal spore.
In sotto voce, shadows pour
and drip while ghost-wings flutterfly
upon the teeming forest floor.
What will be, what were before
‘are still! alive!’ their thin gills cry
on fragile stems, immortal spore.
Come, little ones, come, let’s explore,
what clever, curious eyes can spy
upon the teeming forest floor,
on fragile stems: IMMORTAL SPORE!
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Date: 2020-02-04 10:37 pm (UTC)Well, I think (and it's my laypoet's opinion) that you have to find the couplet that can withstand that much repetition with the villanelle. And know it's always going to be a bit sing-songy if you make the lines as short as I made these ones.
I was upset that sotto voce and sotto bosco didn't rhyme. I almost wrenched them to make it happen. But I did like the flutterfly for butterfly.