My Poem: Original: The first sign of spring

[stonepicnicking_okapi]

Title: The first sign of spring
Rating: Gen
Poetic form: Pantoum
Length: 172

the first sign of spring, the first sign of spring
hear the first cuckoo sing, hear the first one sing
like bells, the birds ring, like church bells, they ring
a new song to sing, a new everything

hear the first cuckoo sing, hear the first one sing,
the hive comes alive, goodbye winter’s sting
a new song to sing, a new everything
hark the new chorus of honeybee’s wing

the hive comes alive, goodbye winter’s sting,
there’s crocus to kiss, sweet nectar to bring,
hark the new chorus of honeybee’s wing
in the breeze, buds swing, the bright bluebells swing

there’s crocus to kiss, sweet nectar to bring
as blossom motes cling to legs thin as string
in the breeze, buds swing, the bright bluebells swing
‘pon soft arrow’s fling, the wild perfumes wring

as blossom motes cling to legs thin as string
like bells, the birds ring, like church bells, they ring
‘pon soft arrow’s fling, the wild perfumes wring
the first sign of spring, the first sign of spring

Comments

[smallhobbit]

A lovely description of spring. A great use of the form.

[stonepicnicking_okapi]

Thank you, thank you!